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The plans show the South Wing of Walton Museum in 2008 and in 2012 after it was redeveloped.

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The given maps illustrate the renovation of the South Wing of Walton Museum in the years 2008 and 2012. Overall, the building has witnessed a massive transformation taken place in merely four years. Most rooms were replaced by other function rooms. And in 2012, the lift was constructed to take the place of the stairs for easier approach to each storey. To start with, the ground floor On the first floor there was a special exhibition room, a shop and a cloak room. The entrance and reception were on the second floor. Stairs were there between the shop and the cloak room. Next to reception was a reading room. By the year 2012, this building had four storeys with a lift from the first floor to the top floor. Children’s play area was there in place of the cloak room, which was moved to the reception. On the second floor a self-service café was opened towards the eastern side of the lift above the reading room. On the west of the lift, above the reception and cloak room, a restaurant was constructed. Another exhibition room was built on the topmost floor above the café. Above the special exhibition room an entrance hall was made, which had a terrace above it. The given maps illustrate the renovation of the South Wing of Walton Museum in the years 2008 and 2012. Overall, the building has witnessed a massive transformation taken place in merely four years. Most rooms were replaced by other function rooms. And in 2012, the lift was constructed to take the place of the stairs for easier approach to each storey. To start with, the ground floor On the first floor there was a special exhibition room, a shop and a cloak room. The entrance and reception were on the second floor. Stairs were there between the shop and the cloak room. Next to reception was a reading room. By the year 2012, this building had four storeys with a lift from the first floor to the top floor. Children’s play area was there in place of the cloak room, which was moved to the reception. On the second floor a self-service café was opened towards the eastern side of the lift above the reading room. On the west of the lift, above the reception and cloak room, a restaurant was constructed. Another exhibition room was built on the topmost floor above the café. Above the special exhibition room an entrance hall was made, which had a terrace above it.
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maps illustrate the renovation of the South Wing of Walton Museum in the years 2008 and 2012.

Overall
, the
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building
has witnessed a massive transformation taken
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place
in
merely
four years. Most
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rooms
were replaced
by other function
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rooms
. And in 2012, the lift was
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constructed
to take the
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place
of the stairs for easier approach to each
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storey
.

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ground floor


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first
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floor
there was a
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special
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room
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shop
and a
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cloak
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room
. The
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entrance
and
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reception
were on the second
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floor
. Stairs were there between the
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shop
and the
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cloak
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room
.
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reception
was a
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reading
room.

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year
2012, this
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building
had four
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storeys
with a lift from the
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floor
to the top
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. Children’s play area was there in
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place
of the
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cloak
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, which was
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reception
. On the second
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a self-service café
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reading
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, a restaurant was
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. Another exhibition
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room
was built
on the topmost
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floor
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above
the café.
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the
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special
exhibition
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room
an
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entrance
hall
was made
, which had a terrace
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above
it.

The
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given
maps illustrate the renovation of the South Wing of Walton Museum in the years 2008 and 2012.

Overall
, the
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building
has witnessed a massive transformation taken
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place
in
merely
four years. Most
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rooms
were replaced
by other function
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rooms
. And in 2012, the lift was
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constructed
to take the
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place
of the stairs for easier approach to each
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storey
.

To
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start
with, the
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ground floor


On the
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first
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floor
there was a
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special
exhibition
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room
, a
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shop
and a
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cloak
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room
. The
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entrance
and
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reception
were on the second
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floor
. Stairs were there between the
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shop
and the
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cloak
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room
.
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reception
was a
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reading
room.

By the
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year
2012, this
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building
had four
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storeys
with a lift from the
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first
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floor
to the top
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floor
. Children’s play area was there in
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of the
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cloak
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room
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reception
. On the second
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floor
a self-service café
was opened
towards the eastern side of the lift
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above
the
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reading
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room
. On the west of the lift,
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above
the
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reception
and
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cloak
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room
, a restaurant was
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constructed
. Another exhibition
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room
was built
on the topmost
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floor
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above
the café.
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the
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special
exhibition
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an
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hall
was made
, which had a terrace
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it.

IELTS academic The plans show the South Wing of Walton Museum in 2008 and in 2012 after it was redeveloped.

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