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The maps compare the changes that took place in John Moores University in Liverpool over a six-year period (2010-2016).

The maps compare the changes that took place in John Moores University in Liverpool over a six-year period (2010-2016). aJAXY
Generally speaking, the university underwent significant alterations: a few new amenities were added, while all existing buildings were upgraded and the transportation infrastructure was changed. It is also manifest that the university made use of its land more efficiently after its renovation. Focusing on educational premises located at the top of the university area, biology, chemistry and physics departments, which were separate in 2010, had been united into a science block by 2016. Also, to the library that was at the left-hand side of science buildings an IT suite was added in 2016. As for other facilities, a new lecture theater was erected just south of the science building. Moreover, a new café was built to the left of the theater. Interestingly, the location of the admin building was not subject to a massive change; it was moved slightly south due to changes in road infrastructure. In fact, the university was accessible only by bus by 2016, and the roads inside its territory were turned into footpath.
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speaking, the
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underwent significant alterations: a few new amenities were
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added
, while all existing
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buildings
were upgraded
and the transportation infrastructure was
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changed
. It is
also
manifest that the
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university
made
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use
of its land more
efficiently
after its renovation.

Focusing on educational premises located at the top of the
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area, biology, chemistry and physics departments, which were separate in 2010, had
been united
into a science block by 2016.
Also
, to the library that was at the
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left
-hand side of science
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buildings
an IT
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suite
was
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added
in 2016.

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was erected
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just
south of the science
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building
.
Moreover
, a new café
was built
to the
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left
of the theater.
Interestingly
, the location of the admin
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building
was not subject to a massive
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change
; it was
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moved
slightly
south due to
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changes
in road infrastructure. In fact, the
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was accessible
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only
by bus by 2016, and the roads inside its territory
were turned
into footpath.

IELTS academic The maps compare the changes that took place in John Moores University in Liverpool over a six-year period (2010-2016).

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