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selecting, reporting and make a comparison to choose a place for opening a restaurant

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The map demonstrates two possible location for a new opening restaurant in a centre of Paris. The first location is the west of a large park and is to west north of the Maritine musuem where has 800 visitors each day. This location is the same distance from the Maritine Museum to the Aquarium which visisted by 2000 customers every day. This location must be the potential place for opening a restaurant due to crowding of tourists that appropriate up to 3000 people each day. Visistor can buy food here and take a tour around the park. The second place is next to the Eiffel Tower that is a symbol of France, is also in front of a park lying on the left bank. Besides, this location 2 is to the west of the Art gallery. The advantages of opening store here are acess to lots of people who visit the Eiffel tower and the Art gallery to buy food and walk along the river to the park and eat thei food.
The map demonstrates two possible
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for a new opening restaurant in a
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centre
of Paris.

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first
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location
is the west of a large park and is to west north of the
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Maritine
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musuem
where has 800 visitors each day. This
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is the same distance from the
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Maritine
Museum to the Aquarium which
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visisted
by 2000 customers every day.

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be the potential place for opening a restaurant due to crowding of tourists that appropriate up to 3000
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people
each day.
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can
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buy
food here and take a tour around the park.

The second place is
next
to the Eiffel Tower
that is
a symbol of France, is
also
in front of a park lying on the
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left
bank.
Besides
, this
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location
2 is to the west of the Art gallery.

The advantages of opening store here are
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to lots of
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people
who visit the
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Eiffel tower
and the Art gallery to
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buy
food and walk along the river to the park and eat
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food.
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