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The maps below show the changes that have taken place at Queen Mary Hospital since its construction in 1960.

The maps below show the changes that have taken place at Queen Mary Hospital since its construction in 1960. 2eyX
The diagrams present information about the developments at Queen Mary Hospital The illustrations display how much progress the hospital experienced from 1960 to 2000. Overall, the hospital encountered drastic changes for the past 40 years. It was evident that between three different reconstructions, Queen Mary Hospital was the only infrastructure that was not affected. In 1960, the hospital was founded along the main road and across a shopping centre. There was also a car park which was located at the opposite directions of a farmland and the hospital. It is seen that a farmland was the biggest establishment in the block. After two decades, a cancer centre and a pharmacy were built in the same location where a shopping centre formerly stand. On the other side of these two properties, it was observable that a farmland was converted to a nursing school. The hospital and a car park remained the same. In 2000, additional improvements happened where a cancer centre was expanded on the southern part and occupied the old spot of a nursing school. It was noticeable that a nursing school was moved in the middle of a cancer centre and a car park. The latter, together with a nursing school, were restored twice as small as what it used to be.
The diagrams present information about the developments at Queen Mary
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Hospital
The illustrations display how much progress the
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hospital
experienced from 1960 to 2000.

Overall
, the
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hospital
encountered drastic
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changes
for the past 40 years. It was evident that between three
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different
reconstructions, Queen Mary
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Hospital
was the
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only
infrastructure that was not
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affected
.

In 1960, the
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hospital
was founded
along the main road and across a shopping
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centre
. There was
also
a car park which
was located
at the opposite directions of a farmland and the
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hospital
. It is
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seen
that a farmland was the biggest establishment in the block.

After two decades, a cancer
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centre
and a pharmacy
were built
in the same location where a shopping
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centre
formerly
stand. On the other side of these two properties, it was observable that a farmland
was converted
to a nursing
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school
. The
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hospital
and a car park remained the same.

In 2000, additional improvements happened where a cancer
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centre
was expanded
on the southern part and occupied the
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old
spot of a nursing
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school
. It was noticeable that a nursing
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school
was
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moved
in the middle of a cancer
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centre
and a car park. The latter, together with a nursing
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school
,
were restored
twice as
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small
as what it
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used
to be.

IELTS academic The maps below show the changes that have taken place at Queen Mary Hospital since its construction in 1960.

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5.0
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