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The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development.

The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development. geLL
The displayed diagrams are given information about some proposed changes to the central area of the town of Islip. As an overall area, a broad assessment of data reveals that the principal change to the town will be the construction of a ring road around the center. Hence, various other developments with regard to shops and housing will accompany the building road. Looking at the map of Islip as it is now, we can see that the main road runs through its center from east to west. all the establishments are opposite to the countryside, which is in the north. In addition, the residential area in the town is at the south, between a school which is located towards the west and a park at the east. Hence, both have access to the main road. On the other hand, the plan is an enclosed town inside a dual carriageway, which has access points (entry and exit) at both east and west. The new establishments anticipated are a bus station, a shipping centre and a car park, which would replace the existing shops at the north of the main road. Furthermore, the main road. Which is the present landmark, is set to be transformed to a pedestrian's way. Finally, two new accommodation facilities are expected to exist.
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around the center.
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Islip
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runs through its center from east to west.
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the establishments are opposite to the countryside, which is in the north.
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is at the south, between a school which
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towards the west and a park at the east.
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road.

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, the plan is an enclosed
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town
inside a dual carriageway, which has access points (entry and exit) at both east and west. The new establishments anticipated are a bus station, a shipping
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and a car park, which would replace the existing shops at the north of the
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.
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, the
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. Which is the present landmark,
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IELTS academic The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development.

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