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the maps below show a student commune room 5 years ago until now

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The illustrations depict modifications regarding an interior design for a community room for students over five years until now. The layouts experienced relatively extensive innovations and reformations, the most notable of which are the replacements and additions of furniture in the centre and the arrangements of some amenities. To the right bottom corner, a modern television was installed in the place where an obsolete fridge had stood, along with three additional armchairs around it. One notable change has been the establishment of a vending machine in front of the refrigerator. In addition, not only a 6-piece round table was superseded by an 8-piece oblong table but another set adjacent to the watching TV corner was also replaced by a side bench facilitating the use of laptops. In the row of various facilities, an adjustment in terms of position was the establishment of a new microwave next to the old one after the removal of the bench. Despite apparent changes, other amenities in the line maintained the status quo.
The illustrations depict modifications regarding an interior design for a community room for students over five years until
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
. The layouts experienced
relatively
extensive innovations and reformations, the most notable of which are the replacements and additions of furniture in the
Possible spelling mistake. 'centre' is British English.
centre
and the arrangements of
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some
amenities.

To the right bottom corner, a modern television
was installed
in the place where an obsolete fridge had stood, along with three additional armchairs around it. One notable
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
has been the establishment of a vending machine in front of the refrigerator.
In addition
, not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
a 6-piece round table
was superseded
by an 8-piece oblong table
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
another set adjacent to the watching TV corner was
also
replaced by a side bench facilitating the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of laptops.

In the row of various facilities, an adjustment in terms of position was the establishment of a new microwave
next
to the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
old
one after the removal of the bench. Despite apparent
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
changes
, other amenities in the line maintained the status quo.
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