Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

the maps below show a school library 5 years ago and now

the maps below show a school library 5 years ago and now OyAjN
The pictures describe how the library’s school changed after some development during 5 years. Overall, the school library was totally transformed in a number of different ways to meet the student’s needs. It has become a modern area to serve for study activities. The classroom was converted into a recording studio while the meeting room has still remained in the west area. Besides, the borrowing and returning desks were split into two separate places, that is borrowing and returning. In middle, the bookshelves in the above area have still maintained whereas the under one was totally flattened. Moreover, the private studying tables have been abroad with more seats. The desk for technology devices has unchanged and permitted the students to operate this area. Finally, the library office was replaced by the conference room.
The pictures
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
describe
how the library’s school
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
changed
after
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
development during 5 years.

Overall
, the school library was
totally
transformed in a number of
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
ways to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
the student’s needs. It has become a modern
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
area
to serve for study activities.

The classroom
was converted
into a recording studio while the meeting room has
still
remained in the west
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
area
.
Besides
, the borrowing and returning desks
were split
into two separate places,
that is
borrowing and returning.

In middle, the bookshelves in the above
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
area
have
still
maintained whereas the under one was
totally
flattened.
Moreover
, the private studying tables have been abroad with more seats. The desk for technology devices has unchanged and permitted the students to operate this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
area
.
Finally
, the library office
was replaced
by the conference room.
What do you think?
  • This is funny writingFunny
  • I love this writingLove
  • This writing has blown my mindWow
  • It made me angryAngry
  • It made me sadSad

IELTS academic the maps below show a school library 5 years ago and now

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
133 words
This writing has been penalized,
text can't be
less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • ?
    Include an introduction and conclusion
  • ?
    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • ?
    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • ?
    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts





Get more results for topic:
  • the maps below show a school library 5 years ago and now