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The maps below compare 2 floor plans of one trade conference held in 2009 and 2010.

The maps below compare 2 floor plans of one trade conference held in 2009 and 2010. q5yB5
The given maps illustrate the information about the layout of the second floor of one trade conference in held 2009 and also show the modification which occurred after a year. Overall, it is noticed that the map and went numerous changes, which include the installation of concert hall, display area and lounge area. In detail, the second floor of trade conference had Main entrance to the Northwest and side entrance on the north east side, but we in the both entrance had a registration in 2009, however that area had been replaced into refreshment in 2010. There was concert Hall and stage along the seats is on the left side of 2000 layout. In addition, in 2010 both area had been removed into one exhibition area. There was a simple balcony in 2009, and with that lounge area was placed there. Besides this a room registration was shifted there. In 2009 in the place of exhibition area stage and concert halls were installed.
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maps illustrate the information about the layout of the second floor of one trade conference in held 2009 and
also
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show
the modification which occurred after a year.

Overall
, it
is noticed
that the map and went numerous
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changes
, which include the installation of concert hall, display
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area
and lounge area.

In detail, the second floor of trade conference had Main entrance to the Northwest and side entrance on the
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north east
side,
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but
we in the both entrance had a registration in 2009,
however
that
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area
had
been replaced
into refreshment in 2010. There was concert Hall and stage along the seats is on the
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left
side of 2000 layout.

In addition
, in 2010 both
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area
had
been removed
into one exhibition
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area
. There was a simple balcony in 2009, and with that lounge
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area
was placed
there.
Besides
this a room registration
was shifted
there. In 2009 in the place of exhibition
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area
stage and concert halls
were installed
.
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IELTS academic The maps below compare 2 floor plans of one trade conference held in 2009 and 2010.

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