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The line chart illustrates how the birth and death rates in New Zealand from 1901 to 2101.

The line chart illustrates how the birth and death rates in New Zealand from 1901 to 2101. PryY2
The line chart illustrates how the birth and death rates in New Zealand from 1901 to 2101. Overall, it can be seen an upward trend for death rates while the birth rates experienced an unstable trend during the given years. Additionally, the birth rates remained the most number with the highest figure in most period. At the beginning, 20000 millions in 1901 the birth rates increased slightly until 1921. However there was a sudden decrease and rose back up to 30000 millions before dropping in 1941. Then, these figure signifacantly increased and reached a peak of 65000 millions 1961. Over the following 2 years, there was a fluctuation and suddenly decreased at 50000 millions in 2001. The birth rates continued to fall to about 40000 millions respectively in 2101. Moving on, 10000 millions in 1901 the death rates increased slightly up to 29000 millions in 2001. These figures rapidly increased and reached a high point over the following 60 years to around 60000 millions. Over the next 20 yeras, the number of death remained steady before continued to decrease at the end of the period to 55000 millions of the rates.
The line chart illustrates how the
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in New Zealand from 1901 to 2101.
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, it can be
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seen
an upward trend for death
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while the
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birth
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experienced an unstable trend during the
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given
years.
Additionally
, the
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remained the most number with the highest figure in most period.

At the beginning, 20000
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millions
in 1901 the
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birth
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increased
slightly
until 1921.
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However
there was a sudden decrease and rose back up to 30000
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millions
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before
dropping in 1941. Then, these figure
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signifacantly
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increased
and reached a peak of 65000
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millions
1961. Over the following 2 years, there was a fluctuation and
suddenly
decreased at 50000
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millions
in 2001. The
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continued to fall to about 40000
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millions
respectively
in 2101.

Moving on, 10000
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in 1901 the death
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rates
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increased
slightly
up to 29000
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millions
in 2001. These figures
rapidly
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increased
and reached a high point over the following 60 years to around 60000 millions.

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, the number of death remained steady
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continued to decrease at the
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end
of the period to 55000
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