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The map shows the changes that have taken place in meadowside village and fonton, a neighbouring town since 1962. v.2

The map shows the changes that have taken place in meadowside village and fonton, a neighbouring town since 1962. v. 2
The three maps illustrates the developments that have occurred in meadowside village and its neighbouring town, Fonton from 1962 till date. There has been considerable changes in the two areas since 1962. These two places which were smaller in the past have gradually increased in size and are now merged with meadowside village now called meadowside suburb. The two places were separate entities with different transportation systems in 1962. Meadowside village had two small west and north roads while Fonton on the east, had a rail system that passed within it. By 1985, the road in meadowside village had been expanded into a main road which passed through the centre of the village. A housing estate and leisure complex were constructed on the Left side of the road and a super store on the opposite side of the road on the southern side of the village. The main road was also extended and connected to Fonton on the east. Presently, larger buildings have been added to the centre of the two merged areas which have also increased in size. The railroad in Fonton now has a west branch which leads to the station in the centre of the area. The hotel and business bank lies on the north and south of the station respectively.
The three maps illustrates the developments that have occurred in
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meadowside
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village
and its
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neighbouring
town,
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Fonton
from 1962 till date.

There has been considerable
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changes
in the two areas since 1962. These two places which were smaller in the past have
gradually
increased in size and are
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now
merged with
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meadowside
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village
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now
called
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meadowside
suburb.

The two places were separate entities with
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different
transportation systems in 1962.
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Meadowside
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village
had two
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small
west and north
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roads
while
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Fonton
on the east, had a rail system that passed within it.

By 1985, the
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road
in
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meadowside
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village
had
been expanded
into a main
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road
which passed through the
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centre
of the
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village
. A housing estate and leisure complex
were constructed
on the
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Left
side of the
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road
and a super store on the opposite side of the
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road
on the southern side of the
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village
. The main
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road
was
also
extended and connected to
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Fonton
on the east.

Presently
, larger buildings have been
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added
to the
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centre
of the two merged areas which have
also
increased in size. The railroad in
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Fonton
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now
has a west branch which leads to the station in the
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centre
of the area. The hotel and business bank lies on the north and south of the station
respectively
.
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IELTS academic The map shows the changes that have taken place in meadowside village and fonton, a neighbouring town since 1962. v. 2

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