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The map illustrates the changes that have taken place in a Fishing village from

The map illustrates the changes that have taken place in a Fishing village from BlMM6
Overall, the lay out of the village has been significantly changed. A number of buildings have been renovated and converted it has also been added a number of areas in the some side of Fishing villageIn 1974 there was forest area on the right corner of Fishing village and it has also been changed to golf course in the 2004. Hotels is in the rare-corner of Fishing village in 2003, but it has been children's area in1974. By the same taken between hotels and original village have been added to the beach in 2004. In 1974 there was harbour in the sea, however it has been renovated to the original village. Olives has been demolished in the 2004 and it has been constructed to the farmlands. (fruit, vegetables for hotels)In the remaining village tourist shops has been opened in 2004 and long road has been converted passes through to the condominium. In 2004 sheep, goats and home of locals beach has been constructed in 2004 respectively
Overall
, the lay out of the
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village
has been
significantly
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changed
. A number of buildings have
been renovated
and converted it has
also
been
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added
a number of areas in the
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some
side of Fishing
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villageIn
1974 there was forest area on the right corner of Fishing
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village
and it has
also
been
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changed
to golf course in the 2004. Hotels
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is
in the rare-corner of Fishing
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village
in 2003,
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but
it has been children's area in1974. By the same taken between hotels and original
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village
have been
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added
to the beach in 2004. In 1974 there was
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harbour
in the sea,
however
it has
been renovated
to the original
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village
. Olives has
been demolished
in the 2004 and it has
been constructed
to the farmlands. (fruit, vegetables for hotels)In the remaining
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village
tourist shops has
been opened
in 2004 and long road has
been converted
passes through to the condominium. In 2004 sheep, goats and home of locals beach has
been constructed
in 2004
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respectively

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