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Air pollution in 4 different countries due to 3 sources

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The bar graph illustrates the air contamination caused by numerous sources in four different countries in the year 2021 and on top of that, the air is polluted mainly because of 3 sources- electricity generation, transport, and industry. Above all, the industries are the main reason for polluting the air especially in Japan and China because they emit approximately 43, 80 ppm of pollutants respectively, whereas the electricity department causes the least pollution even lower than the pollutants generated by transport. Furthermore, Australia is the country which on average causes minimum pollution and all the three pollutant source range from 15-18ppm, whereas in America the air is polluted mainly because of the transportation sector as people prefer travelling on their own instead of using public transport, furthermore the other two source cause much lesser than it. Taking everything into consideration, we can say that, there are an ample of the source which causes pollution but Australia is considered as the country which is capable in controlling it as there is far less pollution as compared to China which pollutes the air the most.
The bar graph illustrates the
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contamination caused by numerous
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sources
in four
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different
countries in the year 2021 and
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, the
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is polluted
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because
of 3
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sources-
electricity generation, transport, and industry.

Above all
, the industries are the main reason for polluting the
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air
especially
in Japan and China
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because
they emit approximately 43, 80 ppm of pollutants
respectively
, whereas the electricity department
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the least
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pollution
even lower than the pollutants generated by transport.

Furthermore
, Australia is the country which on average
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minimum
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pollution
and all the three pollutant
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source
range from 15-18ppm, whereas in America the
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air
is polluted
mainly
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because
of the transportation sector as
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people
prefer travelling on their
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own
instead
of using public transport,
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source
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much lesser than it.

Taking everything into consideration, we can say that, there are
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Australia
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as compared to China which pollutes the
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the most.
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IELTS academic Air pollution in 4 different countries due to 3 sources

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4 paragraphs
183 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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