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The map illustrates the changes implied on the pathway to a city hospital in the years 2007 and 2010.

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The map illustrates the changes implied on the pathway to a city hospital in the years 2007 and 2010. Firstly, in the year 2007, the city hospital was surrounded by a ring road in all four directions, but on the other hand, there was an area for car parking and a hospital road on the south of it which connects to the city road via crossroad. In particular, the bus stop was on either side of the hospital road and the parking area was common for the public as well as the staff. Secondly, in 2010 there were a plethora of modifications done near the city hospital. At first, the parking area of public and staff was segregated, the staff’s car parking was at the previous location but the public car parking was located exactly to the east of the city hospital. Moreover, there were two roundabouts formed one just adjacent to the hospital and the other to the west of city road and both of them were connected to the bus station which was located just opposite to the staff car parking area and connects the hospital road on both ends. Henceforth, the city hospital was modified in three years and made the place more splendid than before.
The map illustrates the
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changes
implied on the pathway to a city
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hospital
in the years 2007 and 2010.

Firstly
, in the year 2007, the city
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hospital
was surrounded
by a ring
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road
in all four directions,
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but
on the other hand
, there was an
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area
for
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car
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parking
and a
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hospital
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road
on the south of it which connects to the city
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road
via crossroad.
In particular
, the bus
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stop
was on either side of the
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hospital
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road
and the
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parking
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area
was common for the public
as well
as the staff.

Secondly
, in 2010 there were a plethora of modifications done near the city
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hospital
. At
first
, the
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parking
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area
of public and staff
was segregated
, the staff’s
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car
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parking
was at the previous location
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but
the public
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car
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parking
was located
exactly to the east of the city
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hospital
.
Moreover
, there were two roundabouts formed one
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just
adjacent to the
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hospital
and the other to the west of city
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road
and both of them
were connected
to the bus station which
was located
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just
opposite to the staff
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car
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parking
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area
and connects the
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hospital
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road
on both ends.

Henceforth, the city
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hospital
was modified
in three years and made the place more splendid than
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before
.

IELTS academic The map illustrates the changes implied on the pathway to a city hospital in the years 2007 and 2010.

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