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The map displays the different distribution of a school in 1985 and now.

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The map displays the different distribution of a school in 1985 and now. It is clear that the school changed dramatically during the period. Overall, it is obvious that more and more facilities have been constructed in this school and much more student studying in this school. In 1985, there was 1500 population in this school, and it had a square car park and a road, which location on the northern of the school. On the east part of the school, there was a classroom block which had 2 storeys. A large field was located in the south part of the school, and on the west part of the school, there are some of the buildings laid in here, which includes office, library and car park. At present, the population of this school increased to 2300. The north car park remains but its size is smaller. On the west part of the school, the new classrooms are constructed, and the classroom block adds the storeys by 3. The south filed was cleared to make a way for pool and fitness centre. On the west part of the school, the car park was demolished, new classrooms were built in here, and the library change to a resource centre which has a computer room.
The map displays the
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in 1985 and
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. It is
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school
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changed
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in this
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school
and much more student studying in this school.

In 1985, there was 1500 population in this
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school
, and it had a square
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car
park and a road, which location on the northern of the
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school
. On the east
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part
of the
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school
, there was a classroom block which had 2
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storeys
. A large field
was located
in the south
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part
of the
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school
, and on the west
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part
of the
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school
, there are
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some of the
buildings laid in here, which includes office, library and
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car
park.

At present, the population of this
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school
increased to 2300. The north
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car
park remains
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its size is smaller. On the west
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part
of the
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school
, the new classrooms
are constructed
, and the classroom block
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adds
the
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storeys
by 3. The south filed
was cleared
to
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make
a way for pool and fitness
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centre
. On the west
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part
of the
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school
, the
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car
park
was demolished
, new classrooms
were built
in here, and the library
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change
to a resource
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centre
which has a computer room.
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