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The chart shows the various age group in Uk who used internet facility in 2003 and 2006

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The given bar chart illustrates the percentage of adults of different age groups using the Internet between 2003 and 2006, in the Great Britain. Overall, adults between 16 and 44 showed the greatest usage of the Internet and the users grew with the time regardless of their age. But, the over 65s had the least percentage of Internet users. The main users of the Internet were young adults aged between 16 and 24 years. In 2003 and 2004, they shared the same percentage, which was 80%. In 2005, this figure increased significantly to 100%, but decreased slightly to 90% in the next year. We can see from the chart that all the age groups experienced an upward trend as far as their daily use of the Internet is concerned. In the 25-44 group, there was a gradual growth in the percentage, from 50% to 80%, between 2003 and 2006. There were similar increase for the 45 to 54 years olds, rising from 60% in 2003, to 80% in 2006. As for the other groups, although the percentage had minor fluctuation, the overall trend was upwords.
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using the Internet between 2003 and 2006, in the Great Britain.

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. In the 25-44
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, there was a gradual growth in the
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, from 50% to 80%, between 2003 and 2006. There were similar increase for the 45 to 54 years olds, rising from 60% in 2003, to 80% in 2006. As for the other
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