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The map depicts the differences between previous and after people carry out tourism development.

The map depicts the differences between previous and after people carry out tourism development. DwPwk
The map depicts the differences between previous and after people carry out tourism development. The original island is a wasteland, there is nothing except for a few trees. However, the island after the renovation has a number of amenities facilities. The pier was constructed to allow people can move back and forth between the island and the mainland, there are two boats close to the pier. It is also has a variety of accommodations separated into two areas are situated on both sides of the reception. And then, the footpath was built that leads tourists to the accommodations and then to the beach and the swimming. The reception located in the center of the island is surrounded by a vehicle track leading to the restaurant in the north and to the pier in the south. Overall, the map indicates that from the deserted island now become a tourist island with convenient amenities facilities.
The map depicts the differences between previous and after
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people
carry out tourism development.

The original
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island
is a wasteland, there is nothing
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except for
a few trees.
However
, the
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island
after the renovation has a number of amenities facilities. The pier
was constructed
to
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allow
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people
can
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move
back and forth between the
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island
and the mainland, there are two boats close to the pier. It is
also
has a variety of accommodations separated into two areas
are situated
on both sides of the reception. And then, the footpath
was built
that leads tourists to the accommodations and then to the beach and the swimming. The reception located in the center of the
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island
is surrounded
by a vehicle
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track
leading to the restaurant in the north and to the pier in the south.

Overall
, the map indicates that from the deserted
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island
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
become a tourist
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island
with convenient amenities facilities.
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