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The map below shows tourists a number of different ways of visiting mountain Eron in a national park.

The map below shows tourists a number of different ways of visiting mountain Eron in a national park. dlAQP
The given diagram provides information about ways for tourists to reach Mount Eron in a national park. Overall, what stands out from the diagram is there are three starting points, all of which provide visitors different routes to get to the mountain. First of all, to reach Mount Eron, visitors either need to get their way pass the aid points or walk from the parking area located in the South to reach the climbing track, the direct track to the mountain. According to the map, from both the sunrise viewing area and the sunset viewing area, tourists need to make their way to their nearest parking station using cars. From there, as there is a footpath that intersects two circular lanes for walking and driving around the mountain, they can walk in any direction to reach the climbing track. The last way is to begin walking from the cultural center, cross the intersection of the driving track by turning right and follow the route until they reach the climbing track directing to Mount Eron. Drivers can join the walkers anytime by parking their cars at either two of the parking spaces on this route.
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diagram provides information about ways for tourists to
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Mount
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Eron
in a national park.

Overall
, what stands out from the diagram is there are three starting points, all of which provide visitors
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different
routes to
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get
to the mountain.

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First of all
, to
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reach
Mount
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Eron
, visitors either need to
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get
their way pass the aid points or walk from the
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parking
area located in the South to
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reach
the climbing
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track
, the direct
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track
to the mountain. According to the map, from both the sunrise viewing area and the sunset viewing area, tourists need to
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make
their way to their nearest
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parking
station using cars. From there, as there is a footpath that intersects two circular lanes for walking and driving around the mountain, they can walk in any direction to
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reach
the climbing
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track
.

The last way is to
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begin
walking from the cultural center, cross the intersection of the driving
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track
by turning right and follow the route until they
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reach
the climbing
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track
directing to Mount
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Eron
. Drivers can
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join
the walkers anytime by
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parking
their cars at either two of the
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parking
spaces on this route.
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IELTS academic The map below shows tourists a number of different ways of visiting mountain Eron in a national park.

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  American English
4 paragraphs
194 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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