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The map below shows three proposed sites for a new hypermarket (A, B and C) in the city of Pellington. v.2

The map below shows three proposed sites for a new hypermarket (A, B and C) in the city of Pellington. v. 2
The map represents three possible sites (A, B and C) in the city of Pellington for a new hypermarket. A is located in North-West of Pellington, whereas site B and C are sited in a countryside. Site B is in North-East corner of the city of Pellington while, site C is located in the South centre of the city. Looking in details, site A has a railway that passes through the surrounding areas (residential and industrial) and on the east of A has traffic zones. If it is built here, it will be next to residential and industrial areas, thus providing easy access by use of railway for those living on the estate. Meanwhile, site B is located in countryside of Pellington but it has the motorway that connects between industrial areas and countryside. If the hypermarket is built here, it can expect to draw people from industrial complexes by use of motorways. In contrast, site C can be accessed by people from industrial and residential since it is surrounded by all. Also, airport is nearby and the railway and motorway make easy to access to it. Therefore, by building a hypermarket in here would draw the most people.
The map represents three possible
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sites
(A, B and C) in the city of
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Pellington
for a new hypermarket.

A
is located
in North-West of
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Pellington
, whereas
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site
B and C
are sited
in a countryside.
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Site
B is in North-East corner of the city of
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Pellington
while,
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site
C
is located
in the South
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centre
of the city.

Looking in
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details
,
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site
A has a railway that passes through the surrounding areas (residential and
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industrial)
and on the east of A has traffic zones. If it
is built
here, it will be
next
to residential and
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industrial
areas,
thus
providing easy access by
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use
of railway for those living on the estate.

Meanwhile,
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site
B
is located
in countryside of
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Pellington
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but
it has the motorway that connects between
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industrial
areas and countryside. If the hypermarket
is built
here, it can
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expect
to draw
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people
from
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industrial
complexes by
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use
of motorways.

In contrast
,
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site
C can
be accessed
by
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people
from
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industrial
and residential since it
is surrounded
by all.
Also
, airport is nearby and the railway and motorway
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make
easy to access to it.
Therefore
, by building a hypermarket in here would draw the most
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people
.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
12Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS academic The map below shows three proposed sites for a new hypermarket (A, B and C) in the city of Pellington. v. 2

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5 paragraphs
199 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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