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The map below shows the development of the village ofDenhan between 1986 and 2016.

The map below shows the development of the village ofDenhan between 1986 and 2016. Xy37E
The given maps represent the alteration in a town of Denhan from 1986 to 2016. It can be clearly seen that in year 1986, the primary school was located in the middle of the town near the shops and post office while, in year 2016, the primary school was extended or the shops remained same. Afterthat, the farmland in east side was knocked down. Moreover, in the past, the garden situated near the large house but after 30 years the garden was removed and at the place of large house the new retirement homes were built. Furthermore, in the south, a farmland had been near the river strake but after a period new homes were constructed at the boarders of street. Whereas, bridge, post office and primary school was remained same in both time periods. Overall, from year 1986 to 2016, there was a lot of development can be seen as the significant change in the number of houses and dramatic decline in farmland.
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Denhan
from 1986 to 2016.

It can be
clearly
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seen
that in
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year
1986, the primary school
was located
in the middle of the town near the shops and post office while, in
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year
2016, the primary school
was extended
or the shops remained same.
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Afterthat
, the farmland in east side
was knocked
down.

Moreover
, in the past, the garden situated near the large
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house
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but
after 30 years the garden
was removed
and at the place of large
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house
the new retirement homes
were built
.
Furthermore
, in the south, a farmland had been near the river
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strake
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but
after a period new
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homes
were constructed
at the boarders of street. Whereas, bridge, post office and primary school
was remained
same in both time periods.

Overall
, from
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year
1986 to 2016, there was
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a lot of
development can be
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seen
as the significant
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change
in the number of
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houses
and dramatic decline in farmland.
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IELTS academic The map below shows the development of the village ofDenhan between 1986 and 2016.

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