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The map below show the development of Melvin Island between 2000 and 2010

The map below show the development of Melvin Island between 2000 and 2010 j5B78
The map exemplified Melvin Island swap from 2000 to 2010. overall it can see that so many changes in Melvin Island during ten years. some new facilities such as a golf course, airport, leisure facilities had been added in over ten years. To start with woodland which was present to the west side in 2000 had been removed and a golf course had been constructed in 2010, while, the second woodland placed to the southern side beside to village had been reduced and build an airport. There was two farmland placed to the west side between garages and tearooms had been same as previous but other farmland was present between woodland and village in 2000 had been removed and swimming pool and spa had been build. moreover, the changes that happened to the western side morel and garages were redeveloped to hotel and chalets in 2010. the tearooms were placed to the southwest side in 2000 had been removed and a seafood restaurant was constructed. one more extra change in 2010 the marinal was placed on the south side below to river was newly constructed
The map exemplified Melvin Island swap from 2000 to 2010.

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overall
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changes
in Melvin Island during ten years.
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some
new facilities such as a golf course, airport, leisure facilities had been
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added
in over ten years.

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with woodland which was present to the west side in 2000 had
been removed
and a golf course had
been constructed
in 2010, while, the second woodland
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placed
to the southern side beside to village had been
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reduced
and build an airport. There was two farmland
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placed
to the west side between garages and tearooms had been same as previous
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but
other farmland was present between woodland and village in 2000 had
been removed
and swimming pool and spa had been build.

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moreover
, the
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changes
that happened to the western side morel and garages
were redeveloped
to hotel and chalets in 2010.
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the
tearooms were
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placed
to the southwest side in 2000 had
been removed
and a seafood restaurant
was constructed
.
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one
more extra
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change
in 2010 the
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marinal
was
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placed
on the south side below to river was
newly
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constructed

IELTS academic The map below show the development of Melvin Island between 2000 and 2010

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6.0
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