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The line graphs show past and future changes in urban and rural populations globally, and information about urban populations in three areas and worldwide. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graphs show past and future changes in urban and rural populations globally, and information about urban populations in three areas and worldwide. BlOM5
The line graphs illustrates past and future changes in urban and rural populations globally, and displays information about urban population in three areas and worldwide. Overall, population in urban areas has increased noticeably in the given duration. Moreover, rural population has rose slightly over the given period. The population in urban areas has grown in Africa, North America, Asia and other parts of the world. Although the most amount of citizens living in urban areas is in Africa. According to the first graph, the urban population has shown an upward trend, from 500 million in the year 1950 to 6100 million by the year 2050. However, on the contrary, rural population has also upsurged but it has remained static between the years 1990 to 2030. In 1950 with around 500 million population to 3000 million in the year 2050 rural population has grown substantially with tiny dip in the year 2030. Moreover, the population in the urban areas has elevated throughout the world. In Africa the highest percentage of the population is living in the urban areas. In 1950 around 65% to 85% in the year 2050 it has grown persistently. In North America,
The line graphs illustrates past and future
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changes
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urban
and
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populations
globally, and displays information about
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urban
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population
in three
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areas
and worldwide.

Overall
,
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population
in
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urban
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areas
has increased
noticeably
in the
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given
duration.
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,
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rural
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population
has
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rose
slightly
over the
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given
period. The
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population
in
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urban
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areas
has grown in Africa, North America, Asia and other parts of the world.
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the most amount of citizens living in
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is in Africa.

According to the
first
graph, the
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urban
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population
has shown an upward trend, from 500
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million
in the
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year
1950 to 6100
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million
by the
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year
2050.
However
,
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population
has
also
upsurged
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it has remained static between the years 1990 to 2030. In 1950 with around 500
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million
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population
to 3000
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million
in the
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year
2050
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rural
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population
has grown
substantially
with tiny dip in the
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year
2030.

Moreover
, the
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population
in the
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urban
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areas
has elevated throughout the world. In Africa the highest percentage of the
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population
is living in the
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urban
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areas
. In 1950 around 65% to 85% in the
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year
2050 it has grown
persistently
.
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In
North America,
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IELTS academic The line graphs show past and future changes in urban and rural populations globally, and information about urban populations in three areas and worldwide.

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