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IELTS Pie Chart - Australian Household Energy Use

IELTS Pie Chart - Australian Household Energy Use mWRDA
The first chart illustrates the persantage of household energy use in Australia and the second chart displays emission of greenhouse gas by the the use of household energy. Overall, heating and water heating are the two main activities of energy consumption, while water heating and other appliances are mainly responsible for the greenhouse gas emission. To initiate, 42% of the total energy is consumed by heating activity, while it contributes only 15% in greenhouse gas emission. Water heating holds nearly one-third part of the total energy consumption and greenhouse gas emission. Other appliances is consuming 15% of the energy and the second main source of the greenhouse gas emission with 28%. Lighting and refrigeration use 4% and 7% of energy respectively, but they contribute in the greenhouse emission with exactly double of their consumption. Cooling is the smallest part of the household energy consumption and the greenhouse gas emission.
The
first
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persantage
of household
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energy
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use
in Australia and the second chart displays
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emission
of
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greenhouse
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gas
by
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use
of household
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energy
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Overall
,
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heating
and water
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heating
are the two main activities of
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energy
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consumption
, while water
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heating
and other appliances are
mainly
responsible for the
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greenhouse
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gas
emission.

To initiate, 42% of the total
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energy
is consumed
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heating
activity, while it contributes
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only
15% in
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greenhouse
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gas
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emission
. Water
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heating
holds
nearly
one-third part of the total
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energy
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consumption
and
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greenhouse
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gas
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emission
. Other appliances is consuming 15% of the
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energy
and the second main source of the
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greenhouse
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gas
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emission
with 28%.

Lighting and refrigeration
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use
4% and 7% of
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energy
respectively
,
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but
they contribute in the
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greenhouse
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emission
with exactly double of their
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consumption
. Cooling is the smallest part of the household
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energy
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consumption
and the
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greenhouse
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gas
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emission
.
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