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The line graph shows visitor numbers to the National Museum before and after its refurbishment in 2010. The pie chart shows visitor satisfaction levels from a survey in 2015.

The line graph shows visitor numbers to the National Museum before and after its refurbishment in 2010. The pie chart shows visitor satisfaction levels from a survey in 2015. e3BYW
The given line graph provides information about the amount of people who visited the the Museum between 1995 and 2015, while, the pie chart gives detail about the percentage of various feedbacks from visitors about their satisfaction from the year 2015. Overall, it is evident that there was a surge in number of international students and locals after the renovation in 2010. Before that, however, the figures were not too high. Tourists, on the other hand, peaked around 2010 but fell to a low value by the end. In terms of satisfaction, majority of people were very satisfied. In 1995, foreign students who visited the National Museum were the highest in number, which was about 45 thousand, while, locals were only 20 thousand. Although, both of these were significantly less in number than international tourists until the refurbishment in 2010, they both escalated drastically after that, and went as high as 60, 000 in case of pupils, and roughly 68, 000 for local residents. The figures fluctuated a lot for tourists, they first grew up-to 65, 000 until the year 2000, but after that, they only declined, and as a result, the final value was as low 30 thousand by the end of the time period. As for the visitor satisfaction survey, more than 50% of them said that they were very satisfied, and the other 1/5th were satisfied. Those who said that they were dissatisfied were half of these, that is, about 10%. The other two figures for the response of very satisfied and those who did not give any response at all, were comparatively very small, about 3% and 8% respectively.
The
given
line graph provides information about the amount of
people
who
visited
the the
Museum between 1995 and 2015, while, the pie chart gives detail about the percentage of various feedbacks from visitors about their satisfaction from the year 2015.

Overall
, it is evident that there was a surge in number of international students and locals after the renovation in 2010.
Before
that,
however
, the figures were not too high. Tourists,
on the other hand
, peaked around 2010
but
fell to a low value by the
end
. In terms of satisfaction,
majority of
people
were
very
satisfied.

In 1995, foreign students
who
visited the National Museum were the
highest in number
, which was about 45 thousand, while, locals were
only
20 thousand. Although, both of these were
significantly
less in number
than international tourists until the refurbishment in 2010, they both escalated
drastically
after that, and went as high as 60, 000 in case of pupils, and roughly 68, 000 for local residents. The figures fluctuated a lot for tourists, they
first
grew up-to 65, 000 until the year 2000,
but
after that, they
only
declined, and
as a result
, the final value was as low 30 thousand by the
end
of the time period.

As for the visitor satisfaction survey, more than 50% of them said that they were
very
satisfied, and the other 1/5th
were satisfied
. Those
who
said that they
were dissatisfied
were half of these,
that is
, about 10%. The other two figures for the response of
very
satisfied and those
who
did not give any response at all, were
comparatively
very
small
, about 3% and 8%
respectively
.
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IELTS academic The line graph shows visitor numbers to the National Museum before and after its refurbishment in 2010. The pie chart shows visitor satisfaction levels from a survey in 2015.

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