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The diagrams give information about changes in a student accommodation. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams give information about changes in a student accommodation. 6lXXK
The presented illustration shows the disparity between two dormitories, one in 2010 and one now. From an overall perspective, it has readily been transparent that there is an additional car park to the South of the main building. Additionally, there is a newly constructed bedroom for learners. First and foremost, there is an increase in the number of bedrooms for pupils. While the construction in 2010 only had 3 available bedrooms, the building now has 5 bedrooms. The living room is eradicated to make room for an additional bedroom. The tiny segment of the original garden to the West of the living room is superseded by another bedroom. While both the kitchen and the bathroom remained completely the same, the kitchen is actually now combined with the social area, leading to a multifunctional zone sited in the east of the building, between 2 students' rooms. Entering the main entrance, which is unchanged, the first room to the left is one of the above-mentioned private rooms for pupils, which is actually undettered, too. Going down the same hallway, the bathroom is still next to one of the private students' rooms, opposite the kitchen-social area. The garden in the Northside of the dorm has increased in size, whereas the South one is entirely eliminated for a newly constructed car parking zone.
The presented illustration
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shows
the disparity between two dormitories, one in 2010 and one
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now
.

From an
overall
perspective, it has
readily
been transparent that there is an additional car park to the South of the main building.
Additionally
, there is a
newly
constructed
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bedroom
for learners.

First
and foremost, there is an increase in the number of
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bedrooms
for pupils. While the construction in 2010
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only
had 3 available
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bedrooms
, the building
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now
has 5
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bedrooms
. The living
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room
is eradicated
to
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make
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room
for an additional
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bedroom
. The tiny segment of the original garden to the West of the living
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room
is superseded
by another
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bedroom
. While both the kitchen and the bathroom remained completely the same, the kitchen is actually
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
combined with the social area, leading to a multifunctional zone sited in the east of the building, between 2 students' rooms.

Entering the main entrance, which
is unchanged
, the
first
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room
to the
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left
is one of the above-mentioned private
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
rooms
for pupils, which is actually
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undettered
, too. Going down the same hallway, the bathroom is
still
next
to one of the private students'
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
rooms
, opposite the kitchen-social area. The garden in the Northside of the dorm has increased in size, whereas the South one is
entirely
eliminated for a
newly
constructed car parking zone.

IELTS academic The diagrams give information about changes in a student accommodation.

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219 words
6.0
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