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The line graph shows us the percentage of young people who live in England aged 16-24 which are unemployed from 1993 to 2012.

The line graph shows us the percentage of young people who live in England aged 16-24 which are unemployed from 1993 to 2012. Pmqd

The line graph shows us the percentage of young people who live in England aged 16-24 which are unemployed from 1993 to 2012. It is clear that London registered the highest rate of unemployment of young adults over the whole period given. It is also noticeable that the trend is similar for the all four categories mentioned between 1993 and 2012. In 1993, the largest proportion of unemployed people aged 16-24 lived in London, about 22% respectively. There were around 17% of them in the rest of England. However, the overall unemployment rate in London and the rest of England was slightly lower, with figures of just under 15% and 10% respectively. Over the next 6 years, there was a decrease of approximately 5% in the unemployment rate of each of the four categories. Therefore, the figure for young people who lived in England and had no job reached its lowest point, with just under 15%. By 2012, the unemployment rate of Londoners aged 16-24 reached its peak, at 25%. People of the same category of age from the rest of England also reached the highest point, at about 21%. By contrast, there were only around 8% unemployed people for each of the two regions, overall London and rest of England.

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