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The line graph shows unemployment rate of Australia in 2012.

The line graph illustrates the percentage of citizens without occupations in city districts and countryside territories from the beginning of 2012 to the last of 2012 in Australia. Overall, the ratio of unemployment in countryside showed downward in the first two quarters while the other portion of city area was displayed upward. However, it is exceedingly apparent that both proportions which displayed the citizens without job decreased dramatically at the beginning of third quarter. After the downward trend, both lines went to the steady upward trend for a period of time. Nevertheless, when the percentages of rural sections reached around 5. 5%, it suddenly turned into fluctuated situation which can be apparently seem the line ups and downs until the last month of 2012. On the contrary, the city districts depicted the third-increased trend from around 3. 9% to 4. 9% in the last quarter of 2012. Moreover, the percentages between both areas in last quarter are the closest compared to another period of quarters.
The line graph illustrates the percentage of citizens without occupations in city districts and countryside territories from the beginning of 2012 to the last of 2012 in Australia.

Overall
, the ratio of unemployment in countryside
showed
downward in the
first
two
quarters
while the other portion of city area
was displayed
upward.
However
, it is
exceedingly
apparent that both proportions which displayed the citizens without job decreased
dramatically
at the beginning of third quarter.

After the downward trend, both lines went to the steady upward trend for a period of time.
Nevertheless
, when the percentages of rural sections reached around 5. 5%, it
suddenly
turned into fluctuated situation which can be
apparently
seem the
line ups
and downs until the last month of 2012.
On the contrary
, the city districts depicted the third-increased trend from around 3. 9% to 4. 9% in the last
quarter
of 2012.

Moreover
, the percentages between both areas in last
quarter
are the closest compared to another period of
quarters
.
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IELTS academic The line graph shows unemployment rate of Australia in 2012.

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