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Oil use of major consumers

The line graph which is drawn in the frame below, indicates the oil’s amount used by its major consumers all around the world in separate groups, through a period of 22 years. As its easily obvious, each line of the diagram with a specific color represents a specified settlement of land (except the red line which is standing for both Western Europe and Japan). By a quick look, it’s clear that, in general for Western Europe, Japan, and also United States, oil consumption drops during the indicated years but for Middle East its gradually rises with a tiny slope, and for the remained one which is China, the oil barrels consumed per day, starts to grow at first, but after a while begins to decline and approximately face a steady state. To sum up, its logical to state that by reaching 2030, all the giant consumer of oil, will converge to a consumption oil’s rate of 2 to 4 million barrels in a day.

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