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the percentage of women going into higher education

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The char elaborate the girls who started the higher education in UK, USA, South Korea and France in 1980 and 2015. According to the chart Australia has equal percentage in both years that is a unique fact consider to other countries. Also South Korea shows the least number of percentage that girls going to higher education. But South Korea gained a growth around 15% in 2015 reaching to 30% from 15%. However UK and USA also indicate considerable growth of joing to higher education around 20% than 1980 while France gaining a less amount of growth. In 2015 USA, Australia have same percentage but UK has nearly 1% or 2% lack. In conclusion, asian county is in low percentage of women’s going to higher study comparing to the other regions.
The char elaborate the girls who
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the higher education in UK, USA, South Korea and France in 1980 and 2015.

According to the chart Australia has equal
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in both years
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South Korea
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the least number of
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that girls going to higher education.
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South Korea gained a growth around 15% in 2015 reaching to 30% from 15%.
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UK and USA
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indicate considerable growth of
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to higher education around 20% than 1980 while France gaining a less amount of growth.

In 2015 USA, Australia have same
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UK has
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of women’s going to higher study comparing to the other regions.
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IELTS academic the percentage of women going into higher education

Academic
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3 paragraphs
130 words
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