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THE LINE GRAPH SHOWS THE RADIO AND TELEVISION AUDIENCES THROUGHOUT THE UK FROM OCTOBER TO DECEMBER 1992.

THE LINE GRAPH SHOWS THE RADIO AND TELEVISION AUDIENCES THROUGHOUT THE UK FROM OCTOBER TO DECEMBER 1992. r6gnL
THE LINE GRAPH ILLUSTRATES THE NUMBER OF PEOPLE LISTENING TO THE RADIO AND WATCHING TV WHO ARE OVER 4 YEARS OLD IN 24 HOUR PERIOD IN THE UNITED KINGDOM FROM OCTOBER TO DECEMBER 1992. OVERALL, BOTH THE PARAMETERS HAVE THEIR UPS AND DOWNS THROUGHOUT THE TIME. HOWEVER, ALMOST 3% OF INDIVIDUALS LISTENED TO THE RADIO AT NIGHT WHILE NUMEROUS PEOPLE WATCH TV AT NIGHT. AS FAR AS TV IS CONCERNED, ABOUT 45% OF THE POPULATION WHO ARE ABOVE 4 YEARS OLD TEND TO WATCH TV FOR A CERTAIN PERIOD. IN CONTRAST, LESS PERCENTAGE OF HUMANS LISTEN TO THE RADIO AT DUSK WHICH IS APPROXIMATELY 5%. FURTHERMORE, AFTER 9 PM THE PERCENTAGE OF PEOPLE WATCHING TV GRADUALLY DECREASES AND REACHES ALMOST 15% OF THE POPULATION. AT 11 AM, ONLY 3% OF PEOPLE WATCH TV AS MANY INDIVIDUALS LISTEN TO THE RADIO DURING THAT TIME. SIMILARLY, THE LISTENERS OF FM WERE LOW UNDER 5% FROM 1 AM TO 6 AM, YET THE PERCENTAGE INCREASES AND ACHIEVED ITS PEAK OF ABOUT 25% IN THE EARLY MORNING, AND EVENTUALLY, THE DECLINATION OF NUMBER HAS BEEN SEEN AS TIME PASSES.
THE LINE GRAPH ILLUSTRATES THE NUMBER OF
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PEOPLE
LISTENING TO THE
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RADIO
AND WATCHING TV WHO ARE OVER 4 YEARS
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IN
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24 HOUR
PERIOD IN THE
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UNITED KINGDOM
FROM OCTOBER TO DECEMBER 1992.

OVERALL
, BOTH THE PARAMETERS HAVE THEIR UPS AND DOWNS THROUGHOUT THE TIME.
HOWEVER
, ALMOST 3% OF INDIVIDUALS LISTENED TO THE
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RADIO
AT NIGHT WHILE NUMEROUS
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PEOPLE
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WATCH
TV AT NIGHT.

AS FAR AS TV
IS CONCERNED
, ABOUT 45% OF THE POPULATION WHO ARE ABOVE 4 YEARS
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OLD
TEND TO
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WATCH
TV FOR A CERTAIN PERIOD.
IN CONTRAST
, LESS PERCENTAGE OF HUMANS LISTEN TO THE
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RADIO
AT DUSK WHICH IS APPROXIMATELY 5%.
FURTHERMORE
, AFTER 9 PM THE PERCENTAGE OF
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PEOPLE
WATCHING TV
GRADUALLY
DECREASES AND REACHES ALMOST 15% OF THE POPULATION. AT 11 AM,
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ONLY
3% OF
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PEOPLE
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WATCH
TV AS
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MANY
INDIVIDUALS LISTEN TO THE
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RADIO
DURING THAT TIME.

SIMILARLY
, THE LISTENERS OF FM WERE LOW UNDER 5% FROM 1 AM TO 6 AM,
YET
THE PERCENTAGE INCREASES AND ACHIEVED ITS PEAK OF ABOUT 25% IN THE EARLY MORNING, AND
EVENTUALLY
, THE DECLINATION OF NUMBER HAS BEEN
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SEEN
AS TIME PASSES.

IELTS academic THE LINE GRAPH SHOWS THE RADIO AND TELEVISION AUDIENCES THROUGHOUT THE UK FROM OCTOBER TO DECEMBER 1992.

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