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The graph below shows the number of hours Canadians spend on watching Tv from 1990-2000

The graph below shows the number of hours Canadians spend on watching Tv from 1990-2000 weJqe
The first bar graph illustrates the number of hours per week spent on watching Tv by Canadian people. Where as, second bar graph explain the average hours of tv viewing per week by age 1999-2000. Overall, it is clearly seen from the graph that Canadians spent more hours on watching Tv in 1991. While, after decade it was nearly 10 times less hours spent on watching Tv. Although, over 60 age group spent more hours per week in compare to other age group. In 1991, Canadian watched Tv approximately 23 hours per week. Which was slightly fall down through out the three year and it reached nearly 22. 6 hours in 1994. Moreover, in 1995 it was dramatically rose almost 22. 9 hours per week. In the next year period around same with previous year. Furthermore, in 1997 to 2000 viewing hours was flactuated. In 2000 the spent hours moderately fall down nearly 22 hours per week respectively. Second graph shows that the, early age group such as 2 to 11 year children watched Tv minimum 19 hours per week. Whereas, age group between 12 to till 35 age year old people viewing tv almost 15 hours per week. In contrast to, 35 to 49 age groups we’re watched tv less hours Than the age group of 50-59. With 30. 2 hours per week over 60 age group respectively.
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1999-2000.
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that Canadians
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in 1991. While, after decade it was
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. In 1991, Canadian
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approximately 23
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. Which was
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was
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moderately
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22
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minimum 19
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between 12 to till 35
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