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The line graph shows the proportion of the population who were aged 65 and over in three nations and predictions for the next 20 years.

The line graph shows the proportion of the population who were aged 65 and over in three nations and predictions for the next 20 years. 0lbLG
The line graph compares the percentage of people aged 65 or more in these three countries over a period of one century. It is clear that the proportion of elderly people increased in each country between 1940 and 2040. Japan is expected to see the most dramatic changes in its elderly population. In 1940, around one in ten of Americans were aged 65 or over, compared to about average 7% of Swedish people and one in twenty of Japanese people. The proportion of elderly people in the U. S. and Sweden rose gradually over the next 5 decades, reaching just under average 20% in 1990. By contrast, the figures for Japanese remained below one in twenty until the early in two thousand years. In conclusion, seeing forward to the future, a sudden increase in the percentage of elderly people is predicted by Japan, with a big jump of over almost one in five in just ten years from 2030 to 2040. By 2040, it is thought that around average one-third of the Japanese population will be 65 years old or more, while the figures for Sweden and the U. S. will be slightly lower, at about one-quarter and almost 21% respectively.
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aged 65 or more in these three countries
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increased in each country between 1940 and 2040. Japan is
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the most dramatic
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population.

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, compared to about average 7% of Swedish
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and one in twenty of Japanese
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. The proportion of
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in the U. S. and Sweden rose
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under average 20% in 1990. By contrast, the figures for Japanese remained below one in twenty until the early in two thousand years.

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jump of
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almost one in five in
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ten years from 2030 to 2040. By 2040, it is
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that around average one-third of the Japanese population will be 65 years
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or more, while the figures for Sweden and the U. S. will be
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IELTS academic The line graph shows the proportion of the population who were aged 65 and over in three nations and predictions for the next 20 years.

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