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imagine you are going to take a group of foreigner to a place of interest in your are. Where would you take them? explain more about that place

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In the beloved country of Vietnam endowed with many wonderful landscapes by nature. It has attracted millions of tourists every year. And Binh Duong where I live is also fortunate to inherit this developing tourism industry. And Suoi Mo park will be the best place for me to take a group of foreigners. First and foremost, Suoi Mo park is located in Dong Nai province and it is only about 100km from Ho Chi Minh city. Not only a prime location but also clear water flowing from pure underground water all year round. Moreover, you will be able to enjoy picturesque nature with mountains hidden in the distance, small streams weaving through the rocky crevices, etc. All will help you temporarily forget about the hustle and bustle of life in the city. Apart from that, you will be able to enjoy swimming, taking photos without spending any money. Thus, Suoi Mo Park is the most suitable destination for schools, companies to organize extracurricular activities, outdoor BBQ parties, etc for groups of young people or families to relax on holidays and weekends because of its reasonable price. All points considered, Suoi Mo park can offer its visitors lots of advantages that we should take into consideration.
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wonderful landscapes by nature. It has attracted millions of tourists every year. And
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will be the best place for me to take a group of foreigners.
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water flowing from pure underground water all year round.
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small
streams weaving through the rocky crevices, etc. All will
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forget about the hustle and bustle of life in the city. Apart from that, you will be able to enjoy swimming, taking photos without spending any money.
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Suoi
Mo
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Park
is the most suitable destination for schools,
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companies
to organize extracurricular activities, outdoor BBQ parties, etc for groups of young
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of its reasonable price. All points considered,
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can offer its visitors lots of advantages that we should take into consideration.

IELTS academic imagine you are going to take a group of foreigner to a place of interest in your are. Where would you take them? explain more about that place

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