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The diagram shows the blue print of City hospital in 2 difference year write a report to university university lecture

The diagram shows the blue print of City hospital in 2 difference year write a report to university university lecture 7LeRk
The diagram describes the blue print of City hospital in the in the year 2007 and 2010. Oral the total area of the hospital is the same but many things have been added and the functionality of the hospital has improved. To begin with City hospital remained the same in both the years. in 2007 the car parking area was fore staff and public but there was removed and the the parking area was separated, public car park was in the east side and the staff car park near was near the hospital road in 2010. However the best of walls on both side of the hospital road in 2007 but that was removed and the new bus station was constructed in the south side. Furthermore, the tho Rambabu about array dad entrance of the entrance of the first station and second one at the corner of the staff car parking in 2010 however the entrance of the public parking was added near the ring road in addition the ring road remain the same in in both years.
The diagram
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describes
the blue print of City
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hospital
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in the in the
year 2007 and 2010.

Oral the total area of the
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hospital
is the same
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but
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many
things have been
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added
and the functionality of the
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hospital
has
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improved
.

To
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begin
with City
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hospital
remained the same in both the years.
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in
2007 the
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car
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parking
area was fore staff and public
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but
there
was removed
and
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the the
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parking
area
was separated
, public
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car
park was in the east side and the staff
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car
park
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near was near
the
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hospital
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road
in 2010.
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However
the best of walls on both side of the
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hospital
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road
in 2007
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but
that
was removed
and the new bus station
was constructed
in the south side.

Furthermore
, the tho
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Rambabu
about array dad entrance of the entrance of the
first
station and second one at the corner of the staff
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car
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parking
in 2010
however
the entrance of the public
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parking
was
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added
near the ring
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road
in addition
the ring
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road
remain the same
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in in
both years.

IELTS academic The diagram shows the blue print of City hospital in 2 difference year write a report to university university lecture

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4 paragraphs
178 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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