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The line graph shows the percentage of different age groups of cinema visitors in a particular country from 1978 to 2008.

The line graph shows the percentage of different age groups of cinema visitors in a particular country from 1978 to 2008. 2b35o
The line graph illustrates the proportion of four age groups of cinema travelers in a specific nation over a three decade period starting in 1978. Overall, It can be clearly seen that percentage of cinema visitors increased among various age groups like 14-24, 25-34 and 35-49, whereas visitors of cinema in 50 above older age group decreased over the period. To begin with, the attenders of cinema on 14-24 younger age group stood only at 90% in 1978 while the ratio declined slightly to 75% in 1988. After that, the percentage rose up to approximately 90% in the year of 1998 and that proportion remained almost same after four years. Then, it had dropped steadily to 80% in 2008. Furthermore, cinema visitors in age groups of 25-34 and 35-49 were fell significantly from 80% and 60% in 1978 to 68% and 50% in 2008 respectively. However, 40% of people who visited theatre by 50+ older age group in 1978 and it had decreased up to 20% in 1988. Finally, the ratio was grew up to 50% at the end of the period.
The line graph illustrates the proportion of four
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of
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travelers in a specific nation over a three decade period starting in 1978.

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that percentage of
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cinema
visitors increased among various
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age
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groups
like 14-24, 25-34 and 35-49, whereas visitors of
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cinema
in 50 above older
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age
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group
decreased over the period.

To
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begin
with, the attenders of
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cinema
on 14-24 younger
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age
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group
stood
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at 90% in 1978 while the ratio declined
slightly
to 75% in 1988. After that, the percentage rose up to approximately 90% in the year of 1998 and that proportion remained almost same after four years. Then, it had dropped
steadily
to 80% in 2008.

Furthermore
,
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cinema
visitors in
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age
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groups
of 25-34 and 35-49 were fell
significantly
from 80% and 60% in 1978 to 68% and 50% in 2008
respectively
.
However
, 40% of
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people
who visited
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theatre
by 50+ older
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age
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group
in 1978 and it had decreased up to 20% in 1988.
Finally
, the ratio was
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grew
up to 50% at the
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end
of the period.
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IELTS academic The line graph shows the percentage of different age groups of cinema visitors in a particular country from 1978 to 2008.

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