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The line graph shows the percentage of 18-25 years old in universities in four different countries.

The given line graph illustrates the percentage of university students in four different nations, namely Singapore, Malaysia, Philippines and Thailand during 1961 to 2011. Overall, it is clearly seen that the proportion of education seekers in all given countries followed upward trend whereas majority was concerned with Thailand. However, there was a minimum difference between the numbers of Malaysia and Philippines. On analysing the data it is apparent that the Singapore pupils increased sharply from 15 % in 1961 to 30% in 1971 While there was a slight decrease in case of Thailand students from 25% to just over 20% during this period of time. The percentage of philippines students remained stable at 7% until 1971 whereas there was a sharp rise in percentage of Malaysia university pupils just around 10% in 1971. Moving towards rest of the description, the percentage of singapore admissions was highest than all other countries until 2001 at 40% while after a decade Thailand take lead by 41% students. Philippines pupils remained stable at 15 % until 2011. However, Malaysia enrollment followed upward trend during given period of time and accounted at just under 20% in 2011.
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countries followed upward trend whereas majority
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, there was a minimum difference between the numbers of Malaysia and Philippines. On
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the data it is apparent that the Singapore pupils increased
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from 15 % in 1961 to 30% in 1971 While there was a slight decrease in case of Thailand
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students
from 25% to
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over 20% during this period of time. The
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philippines
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students
remained stable at 7% until 1971 whereas there was a sharp rise in
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percentage
of Malaysia university pupils
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around 10% in 1971. Moving towards rest of the description, the
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all other countries until 2001 at 40% while after a decade Thailand take lead by 41%
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students
. Philippines pupils remained stable at 15 % until 2011.
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, Malaysia enrollment followed upward trend during
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period of time and accounted at
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under 20% in 2011.
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IELTS academic The line graph shows the percentage of 18-25 years old in universities in four different countries.

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