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The given presentation illustrates the information about the number of mobile phones and landlines per 100 people in different nations.

The given presentation illustrates the information about the number of mobile phones and landlines per 100 people in different nations. To start with, while the figure for number of mobile phones users in Italy went up dramatically to 90, the quantity in Canada plummeted to 39. The number of mobile phones users in Sweden experienced an increase to 89, before hitting a free fall to 46 in US. Comparing the number of mobile phones users in Denmark and UK the difference was only 2. While the number of mobile phones users in Germany was recorded to be 70 out of 100 people. Further scrutinizing the bar graph, the maximum number of landlines users in Denmark which was 89. The figure for number of people use landlines in Italy hit a free fall to 42, after under going an increase to 62 in Canada. It is interesting to noticed that the number of landline users in US and Sweden was exactly equal at 68. Comparing the number of people use landline in Germany and UK the difference was only 1.
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of mobile
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phones
and landlines per 100
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people
in
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different
nations. To
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with, while the figure for
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number
of mobile
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phones
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users
in Italy went up
dramatically
to 90, the quantity in Canada plummeted to 39. The
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number
of mobile
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phones
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users
in Sweden experienced an increase to 89,
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before
hitting a free fall to 46 in US. Comparing the
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number
of mobile
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phones
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users
in Denmark and UK the difference was
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only
2.
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the
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number
of mobile
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phones
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users
in Germany
was recorded
to be 70 out of 100
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people
.
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Further
scrutinizing the bar graph, the maximum
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number
of landlines
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users
in Denmark which was 89. The figure for
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number
of
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people
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use
landlines in Italy hit a free fall to 42, after
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under going
an increase to 62 in Canada. It is interesting to noticed that the
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number
of landline
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users
in US and Sweden was exactly equal at 68. Comparing the
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number
of
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people
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use
landline in Germany and UK the difference was
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only
1.
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IELTS academic The given presentation illustrates the information about the number of mobile phones and landlines per 100 people in different nations.

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  American English
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5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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