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The line graph shows the number of cell phones subscribers in a particular city by gender.

The given graph describes how many men and women in Marysville paid for cell phone service from 1995 to 2015. Overall, while the numbers of both male and female subscribers rose significantly, they increase more for men. The number of male cell phone subscribers climb considerably between 1995 and 2015. In 1995, they started from 500 to subscribe the cell phone service. The number increased remarkably over the next few years until it reached 2500 in the year 2005. There was no change in the number rose slightly between 2010 and 2015. Then, the number went up minimally between 2010 and 2015, when there were about 2750 male subscribers. Similarly, the number of women subscribing to cell phone service rose in most years between 1995 and 2015. In 1995, 500 women were subscribe to cell phone service. By 2005, the number of female subscribers had increased to 2500. There was a slight drop to about 2250 subscribers between 2005 and 2010, and it stayed steady between 2010 and 2015.
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and women in Marysville paid for
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cell
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phone
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service
from 1995 to 2015.

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, while the
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numbers
of both male and female
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subscribers
rose
significantly
, they increase more for
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men
.

The
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number
of male
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cell
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phone
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subscribers
climb
considerably
between 1995 and 2015. In 1995, they
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started
from 500 to subscribe the
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cell
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phone
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service
. The
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number
increased
remarkably
over the
next
few years until it reached 2500 in the year 2005. There was no
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change
in the
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number
rose
slightly
between 2010 and 2015. Then, the
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number
went up
minimally
between 2010 and 2015, when there were about 2750 male subscribers.

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, the
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number
of women subscribing to
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cell
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phone
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service
rose in most years between 1995 and 2015. In 1995, 500 women were
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subscribe
to
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cell
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phone
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service
. By 2005, the
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number
of female
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subscribers
had increased to 2500. There was a slight drop to about 2250
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subscribers
between 2005 and 2010, and it stayed steady between 2010 and 2015.
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IELTS academic The line graph shows the number of cell phones subscribers in a particular city by gender.

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