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The line graph shows the food consumption in China from 1985 to 2010

The given line graph illustrates the figures of food consumed in China between 1985 and 2010. Units are being measured in grams consumed per individual per week. Overall, it can clearly be seen that the highest and lowest consumed food increased from the beginning whereas the other one experienced a major decline. Moreover, fish was the most consumed food throughout the years. In terms of the food with the highest level of consumption, the consumption of fish stood at precisely 600 grams in 1985. Then, the consumption experienced a slight increase to 700 in 1990. In the following five years, it dropped back to 600. From this point onwards, the figure of fish consumption steadily rose and it reached a peak of around/approximately 850 in 2010. Regarding the other types of foods with lower levels, the figures for salt and meat started far lower than meat at just below 500 and 100, respectively. In regard to salt, the figure experienced a steady decrease between 1985 and 2010 and it hit a trough at precisely 200. In contrast, the consumption for meat increased gradually in the same period by 100. As a result, both figures intersect at 200 in 2010.
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food
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consumed
in China between 1985 and 2010. Units are
being measured
in grams
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consumed
per individual per week.

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clearly
be
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seen
that the highest and lowest
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consumed
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food
increased from the beginning whereas the other one experienced a major decline.
Moreover
, fish was the most
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consumed
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food
throughout the years.

In terms of the
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food
with the highest level of
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consumption
, the
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consumption
of fish stood at
precisely
600 grams in 1985. Then, the
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consumption
experienced a slight increase to 700 in 1990. In the following five years, it dropped back to 600. From this point onwards, the
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figure
of fish
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consumption
steadily
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rose and
it reached a peak of around/approximately 850 in 2010.

Regarding the other types of
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foods
with lower levels, the
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figures
for salt and meat
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started
far lower than meat at
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just
below 500 and 100,
respectively
. In regard to salt, the
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experienced a steady decrease between 1985 and
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2010 and
it hit a trough at
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200.
In contrast
, the
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consumption
for meat increased
gradually
in the same period by 100.
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, both
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figures
intersect at 200 in 2010.
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IELTS academic The line graph shows the food consumption in China from 1985 to 2010

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