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The tables show the percentage of young people who were employed in different sectors in one country in 2005 and 2010.

The assigned tabular chart demonstrates the proportion of young masses who were doing job in seven different fields in one nation in 2005 as well as 2010; the data has been provided in percentage. Overall, it is quite evident that in 2005, majority of youngsters were employed in social services department, whereas the least preferred professions were farming and transport. But, shops, restaurants and hotels departments employed large number of youngsters in 2010 as compared to other given sectors. According to the chart given, whilst there were various employment sectors, the most prominent was social services (34%). But in 2010, this figure dropped by 12%. The equal proportion of 21% and 20% was witnessed in manufacturing as well as shops, restaurants and hotels, correspondingly. Employment rate in manufacturing departments, however, fell to 14% and rose to 32% in shops, restaurants and hotels in 2010. In terms of trade and other job sectors, there was a tiny fraction of 1% in 2005 (7% and 8%, respectively) and exactly same in 2010 (10% each). Farming and transport sectors were less preferred by youngsters as a source of their income in 2005, with a figure of 5% only. Nevertheless, an increase of 3% was recorded in the former one (8%) and a decrease of 1% was noticeable in the total of latter one (4%).
The assigned tabular chart demonstrates the proportion of young masses who were doing job in seven
different
fields in one nation in 2005
as well
as 2010; the data has
been provided
in percentage.

Overall
, it is quite evident that in 2005,
majority of
youngsters
were employed
in social services department, whereas the least preferred professions were farming and transport.
But
, shops, restaurants and hotels departments employed large number of youngsters in 2010 as compared to other
given
sectors.

According to the chart
given
, whilst there were various employment sectors, the most prominent was social services (34%).
But
in 2010, this figure dropped by 12%. The equal proportion of 21% and 20%
was witnessed
in manufacturing
as well
as shops, restaurants and hotels,
correspondingly
. Employment rate in manufacturing departments,
however
, fell to 14% and rose to 32% in shops, restaurants and hotels in 2010.

In terms of trade and other job sectors, there was a tiny fraction of 1% in 2005 (7% and 8%,
respectively
) and exactly same in 2010 (10% each). Farming and transport sectors were less preferred by youngsters as a source of their income in 2005, with a figure of 5%
only
.
Nevertheless
, an increase of 3%
was recorded
in the former one (8%) and a decrease of 1% was noticeable in the total of latter one (4%).
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IELTS academic The tables show the percentage of young people who were employed in different sectors in one country in 2005 and 2010.

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