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The charts above show the working patterns of mothers with young children to care for. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information in the charts.

The charts above show the working patterns of mothers with young children to care for. The picture illustrates the caring of mother with children based on working. Overall, youngest children are caried by their mother based on aged, and those are determined on working pattern by their mother. The biggest percentage of mothers choosing not working care children in 0-2 years and 3-4 years old, making up at 70% and 54% respectively, while working in part-time shows the reverse in those, with the same proportion around one in ten. Moreover, the remaining choosing job is working full-time in those, accounting for 19% and 35%. However, more than two fifths and almost half of working full-time are the highest proportion in mothers caring their child in 5-9 years and above 10 years old. Also, working part-time accounts for almost less than a fifth in those, while the latter ones are approximately less than a third. Furthermore, choosing unemployment is in those, with 38% and 26% successively.
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mother
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children
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caried
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mother
based on aged, and those
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pattern by their mother.

The biggest percentage of mothers choosing not
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working
care
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children
in 0-2 years and 3-4 years
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, making up at 70% and 54%
respectively
, while
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working
in part-time
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shows
the reverse in those, with the same proportion around one in ten.
Moreover
, the remaining choosing job is
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working
full-time in those, accounting for 19% and 35%.

However
, more than two fifths and almost half of
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working
full-time are the highest proportion in mothers caring their child in 5-9 years and above 10 years
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old
.
Also
,
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part-time accounts for almost less than a fifth in those, while the latter ones are approximately less than a third.
Furthermore
, choosing unemployment is in those, with 38% and 26%
successively
.
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IELTS academic The charts above show the working patterns of mothers with young children to care for. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information in the charts.

Academic
  American English
5 paragraphs
165 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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