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The line graph shows the fish anf meat consumption from 1979 to 2004.

The line graph shows the fish anf meat consumption from 1979 to 2004. 2R7wX
The line graph depicts the information about how many grams of fish, beef, lamb and chicken people in a European nation consumed weekly per person over a period of 25 years. Having a glance, it can be seen that nearly 60 grams fish was eaten by people in initial year; however, throughout the years the amount of consumption for this decreased gradually and reached less than half grams by 2004. Before, decreasing the uses of beef in 1984, its consumption was more than 200 grams; whilst in 2004 its utilization was de-amplifiied by nearly 100 grams. Turning to the remaining information, approximately same amount of lamb and chicken was consumed by individuals in 1979. After that by following opposite trends chicken utilization was surpassed than beef; whilst, the consumptiin of lamb was decreased dramatically throughout the years. Although in starting year beef was most eaten by European people, in the wnd of the period chicken was most popular choice.
The line graph depicts the information about how
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, lamb and chicken
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in a European nation consumed weekly per person over a period of 25 years.

Having a glance, it can be
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fish
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in initial year;
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by 2004.
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Before
, decreasing the
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beef
in 1984, its consumption was more than 200
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grams
; whilst in 2004 its utilization was
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de-amplifiied
by
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100 grams.

Turning to the remaining information, approximately same amount of lamb and chicken
was consumed
by individuals in 1979. After that by following opposite trends chicken utilization
was surpassed
than
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beef
; whilst, the
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consumptiin
of lamb
was decreased
dramatically
throughout the years.

Although in starting year
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beef
was most eaten by European
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people
, in the
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of the period chicken was
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IELTS academic The line graph shows the fish anf meat consumption from 1979 to 2004.

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