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the centre of a tiny town called Berkshire as it is now and plans for its development.

the centre of a tiny town called Berkshire as it is now and plans for its development. lLJbJ
The given maps compare the centre of a tiny town called Berkshire as it is now and plans for its development. The general overview here is that the town will have undergone a considerable transformation after the construction takes place. According to the first map, it can be seen that all farms from Berkshire will have been removed in the days to come. Griffiths Farm, which is in the top right corner of the map will have been replaced by a supermarket, whereas Hoolanhan farm, which is situated on the right side of McGoldrick road, will make way for a car lot. Moreover, a Farmer’s Market on the bottom left corner of the map will no longer be there in the future. Furthermore, apart from an addition of a roundabout at the conjunction between McGoldrick road and that street. Corbin road will be extended beyond that street. the sports centre will be constructed on the bottom right of the map, there is also notable that while a shop to the bottom left will disappear to make for new houses, the old houses and public park remain unaffected.
The
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compare the
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centre
of a tiny town called Berkshire as it is
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and plans for its development. The general overview here is that the town will have undergone a considerable transformation after the construction takes place.

According to the
first
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map
, it can be
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that all farms from Berkshire will have
been removed
in the days to
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come
. Griffiths Farm, which is in the top right corner of the
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map
will have
been replaced
by a supermarket, whereas
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Hoolanhan
farm, which
is situated
on the right side of
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McGoldrick
road, will
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make
way for a car lot.
Moreover
, a Farmer’s Market on the bottom
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left
corner of the
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map
will no longer be there in the future.

Furthermore
, apart from an addition of a roundabout at the conjunction between
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McGoldrick
road and that street. Corbin road will
be extended
beyond that street.
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the
sports
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centre
will
be constructed
on the bottom right of the
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map
, there is
also
notable that while a shop to the bottom
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left
will disappear to
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make
for new
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houses
, the
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old
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houses
and public park remain unaffected.

IELTS academic the centre of a tiny town called Berkshire as it is now and plans for its development.

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187 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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