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The line graph shows number of visitors per month in summer,2013

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The given line graph illustrates number of tourists who went three museums(British Museum, Natural History Museum and Science Museum)per month in summer between June and September in 2003. Overall British Museum was the most popular museum followed by Natural History Museum and Science Museum. British Museum showed fluctuation pattern while Natural History Museum and Science Museum increased after decreasing over time. Looking at the details in June British Museum which started with 600 people increased gradually to peak in July accounting for around 750 people but it substantially decreased from 750 to 500 people until August ang showed a slow rise between August and September. In contrast National History Museum that started with around 550 people in June and decreased moderately from 550 to approximately 380 people until July and saw a levelling out between July and August and slowly increased again from 380 to 480 people until September was not so popular as British Museum. Comporatively, the least popular museum which began with 400 people in initial month and showed a slight fall until August and significantly rose to a peak with nearly 440 between August and September was Science Museum.
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Museum)per month in summer between June and September in 2003.

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was the most popular
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followed by Natural
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and
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. British
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fluctuation pattern while Natural
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and
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increased after decreasing over time.

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in June British
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with 600
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to peak in July accounting for around 750
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until August ang
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a slow rise between August and September. In
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with around 550
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in June and decreased
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until July and
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a levelling out between July and August and
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increased again from 380 to 480
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until September was not
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popular as British
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which began with 400
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in initial month and
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a slight fall until August and
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440 between August and September was
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