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The line graph shows average monthly temperature of three nations

The line graph shows average monthly temperature of three nations Aw3OX
The line graph depicts the information about the average monthly temperature of Japan, Canada and USA. It can be vividly seen from the line graph that, in the starting of the year average and least temperature of Canada was 5 degree Celsius which was 15 C less the japan. While Highest temperature showed in USA about 2t degree Celsius. Then temperature of Canada and Japan rose and reached on 20 and 25 degree Celsius respectively. Whereas, temperature of USA dropped by nearly 12 degree Celsius in august. The graph further reveals that, in the end of the year temperature of USA increased and raised on 23 degree Celsius and temperature of Japan gradually decreased and become same as USA. Lastly, temperature of Canada dropped and reached on their starting point. Overall, it is clear that in the end of the picture of all the given a nation become same on as starting month. Task 2 Well there are two type of vehicle first one in motor vehicle and other one is bicycle and it can be seen in some cities that motor vehicle removing the bicycle; whereas, in some cities two Weller are replacing cars due to various reasons which I will explain in the upcoming paragraphs. To begin with, the factors which involves to replacing bicycl. First of all people become modern so they want to keep merely expensive things in their home so their kith and kin can see how they are rich. Secondly it is a faster and convenient mode of transport it can pick whole family and arrives them on any please whereas, bicycle surly pick up only one and two people and it is so slower than cars. On the other hand, those cities which used only motor vehicle are suffering from pollution and some health ttroubles such as motor vehicle run by fuel and oil so it spread gasses which make environment polluted, whereas a bicycle is the eco-friendly mode of transport so they prefer to use bycycle rather than cars. Hence, in the car they only sit and drive but through the bicycle they can give moment to their whole body so they can keep their body fit and healthy. To conclude, although there are a lot of reasons to replacing bicycle and cars, I think second development is the better because through it people can become healthy and also it is environment friendly.
The line graph depicts the information about the average monthly
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temperature
of
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Japan
, Canada and USA.

It can be
vividly
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seen
from the line graph that, in the starting of the year average and least
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temperature
of Canada was 5
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degree
Celsius which was 15 C less the
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japan
.
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While
Highest
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temperature
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showed
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in USA
about 2t
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degree
Celsius. Then
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temperature
of Canada and
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Japan
rose and reached on 20 and 25
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degree
Celsius
respectively
.
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Whereas
,
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temperature
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of USA
dropped by
nearly
12
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degree
Celsius in
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august
.

The graph
further
reveals that, in the
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end
of the year
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temperature
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of USA
increased and raised on 23
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degree
Celsius and
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temperature
of
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Japan
gradually
decreased and
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become
same as USA.
Lastly
,
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temperature
of Canada dropped and reached on their starting point.
Overall
, it is
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clear
that in the
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end
of the picture of all the
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given
a nation
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become
same on as starting month. Task 2

Well there are two type of
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vehicle
first
one in
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motor
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vehicle
and other one is
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bicycle
and it can be
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seen
in
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some
cities that
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motor
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vehicle
removing the
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bicycle
; whereas, in
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some
cities two Weller are replacing
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cars
due to various reasons which I will
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explain
in the upcoming paragraphs.

To
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begin
with, the factors which involves to replacing
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bicycl
.
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First of all
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people
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become
modern
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so
they want to
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keep
merely
expensive things in their home
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so
their kith and kin can
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see
how they are rich.
Secondly
it is a faster and convenient mode of transport it can pick whole family and arrives them on any
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please
whereas,
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bicycle
surly pick up
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only
one and two
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people
and it is
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so
slower than cars.

On the other hand
, those cities which
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used
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only
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motor
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vehicle
are suffering from pollution and
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some
health
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ttroubles
such as
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motor
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vehicle
run by fuel and oil
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so
it spread gasses which
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make
environment polluted, whereas a
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bicycle
is the eco-friendly mode of transport
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so
they prefer to
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use
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bycycle
rather
than
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cars
.
Hence
, in the
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car
they
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only
sit and drive
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but
through the
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bicycle
they can give moment to their whole body
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so
they can
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keep
their body fit and healthy.

To conclude
, although there are
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a lot of
reasons to replacing
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bicycle
and
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cars
, I
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think
second development is the better
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because
through it
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people
can
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become
healthy and
also
it is environment friendly.
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IELTS academic The line graph shows average monthly temperature of three nations

Academic
  American English
6 paragraphs
401 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 5.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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