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TASK 1 essay about components of GDP in the UK

TASK 1 essay about components of GDP in the UK ORrJG
The bar chart illustrates the gross domestic product generated from the IT and Service Industry in the UK from 1992 to 2000. It is measured in percentages. Overall, it can be seen that both increased as a percentage of GDP, but IT remained at a higher rate throughout this time. At the beginning of the period, in 1992, the Service Industry accounted for 4 per cent of GDP, whereas IT exceeded this, at just over 6 per cent. Over the next four years, the levels became more similar, with both components standing between 6 and just over 8 per cent. IT was still higher overall. However, over the following four years, the patterns of the two components were noticeably different. The percentage of GDP from IT increased quite sharply to 12 in 1996 and then nearly 15 in 2000, while the Service Industry stayed nearly the same, increasing to only 8 per cent. At the end of the period, the percentage of GDP from IT was almost twice that of the Service Industry
The bar chart illustrates the gross domestic product generated from the IT and Service Industry

in the UK from 1992 to 2000. It
is measured
in
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percentages
.
Overall
, it can be
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seen
that both

increased as a
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percentage
of GDP,
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but
IT remained at a higher rate throughout this time.

At the beginning of the period, in 1992, the Service Industry accounted for 4 per cent of GDP,

whereas IT exceeded this, at
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just
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over
6 per cent.
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Over
the
next
four years, the levels became

more similar, with both components standing between 6 and
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just
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over
8 per cent. IT was
still


higher
overall
.

However
,
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over
the following four years, the patterns of the two components were
noticeably


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different
. The
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percentage
of GDP from IT increased quite
sharply
to 12 in 1996 and then
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15 in 2000, while the Service Industry stayed
nearly
the same, increasing to
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only
8 per cent.

At the
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end
of the period, the
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percentage
of GDP from IT was almost twice that of the Service

Industry
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IELTS academic TASK 1 essay about components of GDP in the UK

Academic
  American English
5 paragraphs
172 words
6.5
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