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The line graph show the amount of money spent on sporting activities by British parents on their children and the number of children took part in three sports over a period of 6 years.

The line graph show the amount of money spent on sporting activities by British parents on their children and the number of children took part in three sports over a period of 6 years. paX7w
The line graph show the amount of money spent on sporting activities by British parents on their children and the number of children took part in three sports over a period of 6 years. It clear that the expenditure on sporting activities by British parents on their children increased years by year between 2008 and 2014. Besides, the number of children participated football which was sinificanty more popular than athletics and swimming. At the first year, British parents spent a mount of around 20 pounds on their children’sporting activities. Over the remain years, the monthly amount rose gradually. By 2014, Parent’ spending on children’s sport had risen to just over 30 pounds. Looking at the second chart, in 2008, Participation in football were just above 8 millions, while only 2 millions children were enrolled in swingming clubs and around 1 million took part in athletics. Over the following six years, the propotion of children participating in football remained relatively stable. By contrast, the figure for swimming rose steadily, with reaching a peak of around 4 million in 2014 and the number of children doing atheletics increasted nearly fivefold.
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, British
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IELTS academic The line graph show the amount of money spent on sporting activities by British parents on their children and the number of children took part in three sports over a period of 6 years.

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