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The two given pie charts depict the proportion of these household expenses in two Asia countries, namely Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010.

The two given pie charts depict the proportion of these household expenses in two Asia countries, namely Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010. b2QlB
The two given pie charts depict the proportion of these household expenses in two Asia countries, namely Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010. At the first glance, it is clear that the percentage of housing had a high density in two countries in 2010. Moreover, the figure for health care was lowest. As is presented in the graph, the percentage of the Japanese’s housing reaches at 29%, however, in Malaysia is a little less than those in Japan, made up 26%. After that, these products consumed in Japan and Malaysia accounts for a quarter, at 24% and 27% respectively. Regarding to proportion of transportation in Japan, it is two fold increase in those in Malaysia, consisted 20%. In terms of health care, it is less common than others in Asia countries, at 6% and 3% respectively. Additionally, other goods and services comprise 21% in Japan while in Malaysia, it is much more than those in Japan, took up 34%.
The two
given
pie charts depict the proportion of these household expenses in two Asia countries,
namely
Japan
and Malaysia in the year 2010.

At the
first
glance, it is
clear
that the percentage of housing had a high density in two countries in 2010.
Moreover
, the figure for health care was lowest.

As
is presented
in the graph, the percentage of the Japanese’s housing reaches at 29%,
however
, in Malaysia is a
little
less than those in
Japan
, made up 26%. After that, these products consumed in
Japan
and Malaysia accounts for a quarter, at 24% and 27%
respectively
.

Regarding to
proportion of transportation in
Japan
, it is
two fold
increase in those in Malaysia, consisted 20%. In terms of health care, it is less common than others in Asia countries, at 6% and 3%
respectively
.
Additionally
, other
goods
and services comprise 21% in
Japan
while in Malaysia, it is much more than those in
Japan
, took up 34%.
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IELTS academic The two given pie charts depict the proportion of these household expenses in two Asia countries, namely Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010.

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