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the information of Date opened, Kilometres of route and the amount of passengers per year of the underground railway system in six cities.

the information of Date opened, Kilometres of route and the amount of passengers per year of the underground railway system in six cities. AJPeM
The table provided the information of Date opened, Kilometres of route and the amount of passengers per year of the underground railway system in six cities. Overall, it can be easily seen that the oldest underground railway system had the longest way and the highest passengers per year than the earlier ones. London railway system, where opened in 1863, had 394 kilometres of route and reached 775 million passenger per years. The Paris railway system was opened in 1900, although it ran 199 km in the route but Paris had a far higher passengers (1191 million passengers) than London. In Tokyo, the undergound railway system was started in 1927 but the amount of passengers per year reached dramatically was 1927 millions people per year. Looking at the remaining cities,
The table provided the information of Date opened,
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Kilometres
of route and the amount of
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passengers
per
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year
of the underground
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railway
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system
in six cities.

Overall
, it can be
easily
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seen
that the oldest underground
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railway
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system
had the longest way and the highest
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passengers
per
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year
than the earlier ones.

London
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railway
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system
, where opened in 1863, had 394
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kilometres
of route and reached 775 million
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passenger
per years. The Paris
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railway
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system
was opened
in 1900, although it ran 199 km in the route
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but
Paris had a far higher
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passengers
(1191 million
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passengers)
than London. In Tokyo, the
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undergound
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railway
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system
was
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started
in 1927
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but
the amount of
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passengers
per
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year
reached
dramatically
was 1927 millions
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people
per year.

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IELTS academic the information of Date opened, Kilometres of route and the amount of passengers per year of the underground railway system in six cities.

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