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The line graph provides us the information about the rate of male and female membership from 1980 to 2010.

The line graph provides us the information about the rate of male and female membership from 1980 to 2010. w7egm
The line graph provides us the information about the rate of male and female membership from 1980 to 2010. The proportion of male membership is highest in 2005 with 5000 people to do this but it is very low in 1995 and have change continuous. about the female, it is have highest number is about 3000 people in 1995 and 2005. Beetween the number of male and female membership is very different. The male memberships has increase from 2000 people in 1980 to 4000 in 1985. And after that, it is sudden decrease fromm 4000 people to 1600 people in 1995. Gradually, the proportion has increase from 2000 people in 1995 to 4000 people in 2000 anf finally, hass reach a peak in 2005, about 5000 people. The female memberships has 1000 people in 1980 and after that, increase gradully to 2000 people in 1985, 3000 peole in 1995, and decrease from 3000 to 2200 people in 2000 and after that, it has 2500 gym memberships is 2900 beetween 2005 and 2010. Generally, the number of male gym memberships more than the female gym membership throughout years from 1980 to 2010.
The line graph provides us the information about the rate of male and
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female
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membership
from 1980 to 2010.

The proportion of male
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membership
is highest in 2005 with 5000
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people
to do this
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it is
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very
low in 1995 and have
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change
continuous.
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about
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, it is
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have
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number is about 3000
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people
in 1995 and 2005.
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the number of male and
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female
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membership
is
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very
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different
.

The male
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memberships
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has
increase from 2000
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people
in 1980 to 4000 in 1985. And after that, it is sudden decrease
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fromm
4000
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people
to 1600
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people
in 1995.
Gradually
, the proportion has increase from 2000
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people
in 1995 to 4000
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people
in 2000
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anf
finally
,
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hass
reach a peak in 2005, about 5000
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.

The
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female
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has
1000
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people
in 1980 and after that, increase
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gradully
to 2000
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people
in 1985, 3000
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peole
in 1995, and decrease from 3000 to 2200
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in 2000 and after that, it has 2500 gym
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memberships
is 2900
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beetween
2005 and 2010.

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, the number of male gym
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more than the
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female
gym
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membership
throughout years from 1980 to 2010.

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