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The given bar chart clearly depicts information regarding the number of consumers buying good things, divides by countries, for 5 particularly good products in 2010. The mentioned products include cars, computers, books, cameras, and perfume. Overall, it can be noticeable that there are 3, 135, 000 consumers (1, 375, 000 by France and 1, 760, 000 by UK (United Kingdom henceforth) in total, most of whom (400, 000 by France and 450, 000 by UK) from cars. In further detail, it can be notice that the computers is the second most popular with 725, 000 (375, 000 by France and 350, 000 by UK. Meanwhile, although there are almost many consumers buying for the books at 710, 000 (300, 000 by France and 410, 000 by UK) as those for the cameras at 510, 000 (150, 000 by France and 360, 000 by UK). Finally, the quantity of consumers buying for the perfumes account for the lowest at only 340, 000 (200, 000 by France and 140, 000 by UK).
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things, divides by countries, for 5
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products in 2010. The mentioned products include cars, computers, books, cameras, and perfume.
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consumers
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1, 375, 000 by France and 1, 760, 000 by UK (United Kingdom henceforth) in total, most of whom (400, 000 by France and 450, 000 by UK) from cars.

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further
detail, it can be notice that the computers is the second most popular with 725, 000
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375, 000 by France and 350, 000 by UK. Meanwhile, although there are almost
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consumers
buying for the books at 710, 000 (300, 000 by France and 410, 000 by UK) as those for the cameras at 510, 000 (150, 000 by France and 360, 000 by UK).
Finally
, the quantity of
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consumers
buying for the perfumes account for the lowest at
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only
340, 000 (200, 000 by France and 140, 000 by UK).
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IELTS academic the number of consumers buying good things

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